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Calloused hands clasp calloused hands
smooth chest against smooth chest
strong hips pressed into strong hips
and chapped lips on chapped lips
a violent exploration begins
as desire clashes with fear
a clenched fist becomes a harsh embrace
drunken sleep becomes an intoxicated race
against time, against the cold
against themselves
love isn't gentle, or slow
love doesn't care if you're the last to know
love follows no rules
love is violent, and sudden
it will be whatever you wish it to be
love comes thundering down, without mercy
it comes on a frenzied wind of curses
and the fumbling of belt buckles
and the sensation of skin on skin
any inhibitions there might have been
naked body on naked body
their world explodes
nothing soft or romantic here
this is pounding, pain, control and fear
but more sensuous then anything ever felt before
hands around eachothers throats
an attempt to choke out the passion, the lust
tongue once again finds tongue, as they must
and amidst the gasps and the moans
two men realize
"Old Brokeback got us good..."
Ok, so i saw Brokeback Mountain this weekend...what an amazing movie. I had to write about it. This definitly doesn't do it justice, but it's what i came up with. Enjoy, and if you havn't seen the movie, go!
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Miss-Cookiie Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2009
This poem is amazing. love the vocabulary used.
true to the story.

give yourself a pat on the back :P lol.
xx
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009
thank you :)
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xc10 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2008
the movie was great and this is great
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reiamadeo Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2008
This poem is harsh but THAT true!
T___T
BBM rules the world!
Incredible poem...love it!
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2008
haha thank you :)
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SabakuNoBaka Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2008
OMG. I LOVE YOU. MARRY ME RIGHT NOW. >.<

This is amazing...just...wow....AMAZING. Left me speechless....WOW. *can't even think of a way to describe it*

And the ending was so...like...I was reading it, on the edge of my seat, just like, O.O "This is great"

And the ending like, I was like, "HA!! I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!"

Seriously amazing. Well done.
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2008
wow....quite a compliment. haha i'm very glad you liked it so much. :)
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Janie-G Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2008
Hi, I love this! Could I have your permission to show it to the BBM discussion goup I belong to? I know they'd love it too.
Janie
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2008
Hi....thank you so much for the kind words. :) You absolutely have my permission, and i hope it goes over well. Let me know? :hug:
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Janie-G Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2008
Thanks so much! I'll post it today and then let you have the feedback. What you wrote captured that moment so perfectly it took me right back to when I first saw it.
Thanks again. :hug:
Janie
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Janie-G Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2008
Hi, Here's some of the feedback so far from my discussion group. As you can see, they absolutely loved Tough Love! Thanks for letting me share it with them. Janie

OMG - words fail me! Is it hot in here?

I'm with you, Sylvia. This is extraordinary! Took my
breath away.

Thanks Janie, one can see that FNIT thinking about it followed by their other couplings.

Awesome! Worth reading many times....

Thank you so much for Sharing this, Janie. I am so touched by these words. It never ceases to amaze me how some people can create words to fit these special men
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nimrod14 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2007  Hobbyist
Wwo beautiful, I really like this =D
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2007
Hehe thank you...and thank you for the :+fav: !!
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nimrod14 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2007  Hobbyist
You're very welcome! You deserved it =D
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Janie-G Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2007
Hi to a fellow Brokie! I love this piece. You just captured the passion and the fear perfectly. The use of language is superb and yes, it does do it justice! Don't you love Annie Proulx too? Wonderful writer.Well done,you obviously understand Jack and Ennis well.....gorgeous boys! :+fav: :sun:
Come and see my BBM art. :iconjanie-g:
Janie
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2007
haha thank you thank you thank you!! esp for the fav! <3

and they are indeed wonderful!
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Janie-G Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2007
You're welcome! I love reading people's Brokeback work and this was really terrific. :sun:
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commits Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007   Digital Artist
I adore this! <3 Amazing movie.

+Fav for suree.
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2007
haha thank you so much!! :D And yessss it is!
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GhostAsylum Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2007  Student Traditional Artist
hot
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2007
^_^ thank you! and thanks for the :+fav: !!! :hug:
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Etah Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2006
Fantastic. I love it.
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2006
thank you! =)
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MarianaoftheSouth Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2006
You should read the story the movie is based off of. :) I've yet to see the movie (no one wants to release it down here in Tennessee. *grrrrr*), but the story is good. it's not a book- just a short story, but well worth it. :)
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2006
i did....found it online lol...yeah, the movie does it justice...i hope you get it released soon or something!!!
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DragonVampire Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2006
:+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav::+fav: omg!! i loved that movie and i love this poem
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2006
lol thank you for the crazy :+fav: hahaha <3
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LookingGlassGirl Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2006
:orgasm:
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XscreamxmyxnameX Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2006
hahaha holly i looooooveeeeeee you!! thank you for the favoritesss
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